Thursday, September 13, 2018
Weekly Reflection Wk 8
This week has been a pretty busy week. I have done well to keep up and have been very successful in doing my work to a high standard. I can cope with not having a structured day and not being told we have to do a certain subject at a certain time. I will be fine with doing my own work at any time and will focus on things that are close to becoming . I have completed my Kiwi kids news featured article, have started my personal inquiry and have finish all my fairy tale writing and scratch. I have made progress on my water colour portfolio and am hoping to finish it by the end of next week.
Tuesday, September 11, 2018
Rapunzel Moment in time Sentence
Original sentence: No one dared enter this garden.
My Version: The sprouting piece of land was untouched by human matter, for the consequences that lay ahead for the daredevil that planted down their handcrafted boot on that garden were horrible.
Why I chose this sentence: I chose this sentence because it was one of the first sentences and if it was as it was before I changed it they would not read the piece of writing due to the lack of secrecy in the sentence and wouldn’t read the story to the end non stop because other activities would be more exciting.
What I changed: I changed the level of secrecy of the sentence so it hooks the reader and makes them want to keep reading because they know there will be more sentences that made them more excited about the story. I also changed the length of the sentence because a crucial sentence to keep people reading the story shouldn’t have six words because it shortens the story and there is less chance to make the reader enjoy reading the story.
My Version: The sprouting piece of land was untouched by human matter, for the consequences that lay ahead for the daredevil that planted down their handcrafted boot on that garden were horrible.
Why I chose this sentence: I chose this sentence because it was one of the first sentences and if it was as it was before I changed it they would not read the piece of writing due to the lack of secrecy in the sentence and wouldn’t read the story to the end non stop because other activities would be more exciting.
What I changed: I changed the level of secrecy of the sentence so it hooks the reader and makes them want to keep reading because they know there will be more sentences that made them more excited about the story. I also changed the length of the sentence because a crucial sentence to keep people reading the story shouldn’t have six words because it shortens the story and there is less chance to make the reader enjoy reading the story.
Friday, September 7, 2018
Weekly reflection Wk/7
This week has been confusing and has been hard to keep up with everything. Even though it has been hard to keep up I have tried hard to keep up and have done surprisingly well. We have been learning about being connected and I have tried to be connected with everyone and trying to make the connection stronger between me and everyone else in the school. I completed my Hansel and Gretel story after being behind and also my Kiwi kids news featured article. I have done well in math because I have been practicing. This week has been a good week.
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